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Editing Exercise

Editing Exercise

Q • What are the overall strengths of the essay? • What are the overall weaknesses of the essay? • Address each of the following four criteria based on the essay's strengths and weaknesses: o Is the essay concise? How? o Is the essay credible? How? o Is the essay clear? How? o Is the essay correct? How? • What specific recommendations would you make to improve this essay?

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• The overall strengths of the essay are the topic selection and the organization of the ideas. • The overall weaknesses are many like the wrong usage of punctuation, verb errors, run-ons, and comma splices. The repetitions of the sentences are evident in the body paragraphs. o The essay is concise. There are substantial information needs to be added in the body paragraphs and the conclusion part is missing in the essay. o The essay is not credible because there is no particular reference of the author and the authorized body whom the proposals need to be conveyed.